Dear Suzanne:

I am having a difficult time trying to understand your writing. You do use a good vocabulary and I sense that you are quite educated, but your writing is vague, not clear, and I can’t follow your logic, I can’t understand what you are trying to say. I understand that part reason is that English is not the language you grew up with.

If you want to write more clearly, pretend that you are a seven year old and use the vocabulary that a 7 year old will use, and use short, simple, clear sentences, editing your sentences best you can, so that they are clear.

Looking at your most recent post of three sentences, this is what I am unclear about:

1. “My dad wouldn’t be considered a ‘broken man'”-who wouldn’t consider him a “broken man”, why wouldn’t he be considered a broken man, and can he be considered a broken man for being an alcoholic husband and father?

2. “I’d really be the one more focused on his flaws than him”- what flaws are you referring to: him hiding from you the fact that he was married before he married your mother? If so, how is it a flaw (I see it as a choice, and not a bad choice for a parent to not reveal their prior marital history to their children)? Do you consider him getting drunk a flaw? Any other flaws? How is he not focused on his flaws (does he present himself as perfect, as one to never make mistakes)?

3. “I like the idea of ‘broken men’ given the chance to open up and love again”- In what ways do you want a romantic partner(the older man you wish to have a long term relationship with) to be broken (should he too be previously married? an alcoholic? other?), and “given the chance to open up and love again“- but if your father is not a broken man, why do you want to love a broken man?

anita