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August 14, 2017 at 7:41 am
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Dear Myles:
Thank you for sharing your poem!
I like many of the rhymes, they are pleasing to me mental ear, especially these: “I wish (I wish) I wasn’t always trying to be right/ …to pick a fight” and “So how did I manage/ To cause you so much damage”
In your poem, you asked: “What did I do that made you walk away?/ There must be a reason/
That you decided on leavin”- you answered that question at least in part earlier in the poem: you were “always trying to be right… always trying to pick a fight….(and said) so many thing I wish I didn’t say”.
I like it. Hope you write and share more.
anita