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    Myles
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    For years, when I would look for advice on how to deal with my emotions, keeping a journal or writing would always pop up, but I tended to hate everything I’d written (English was one of my strong subjects in school, so I always “graded” my experiences instead of just letting them be what they were.) And I never really got round to writing anything, let alone a song or a poem.

    But I’ve turned over a new leaf, and whenever I wrote in school, although it would be frustrating when I would have only short bursts of inspiration and then couldn’t find what I wanted to say next, I enjoyed it. So I’ve decided that when I’mnot just writing down my experiences as they are, I’ turning theminto R&B songs. This song is called ” Old Thing Back.” I tried to think back to when my last relationship ended, and the guilt and regret that followed me for what seemed like forever. So, here goes :

     

    I wish (I wish)

    I wasn’t always trying to be right

    I wish (I wish)

    I wasn’t always trying to pick a fight

    I wish (I wish)

    I was a little more considerate

    I wish (I wish)

    We could go back where we left

    Off, there’s so many thing I wish I didn’t say

    But I know good and damn well that there’s no way

    So I wish you the best and all, but I just wish that you would call,

    So I could tell you that I

    Remember all those times when you and only you held me down

    And when you picked me and my Bull**** up off the ground

    So how did I manage

    To cause you so much damage

    I don’t know but

    I know that you were the first one who truly got me

    I know that you were the first one to see me truly

    Now I know I ain’t perfect

    But I can’t give this a rest

    So can we get that old thing back?

    It’s been 3 damn months

    And I just can’t believe

    I gave you so many reasons to up and leave

    I thought I gave all my love

    Thought I fit just like a glove

    But I guess I was a size to small

    What did I say that made you think I changed?

    What did I do that made you walk away?

    There must be a reason

    That you decided on leavin,

    I don’t know, but all I can is I

     

    CHORUS

     

    My heart can’t go on without your presence

    Every kiss every smile was truly a blessing

    But I know that you deserve better

    So I’m gon let you do just that

    But before you step, i just got to say

    That although it hurts

    You should have it your way

    So go’ head on,

    But I just have to say…

    CHORUS

    End.

    • This topic was modified 6 years, 7 months ago by Myles.
    #163858
    Anonymous
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    Dear Myles:

    Thank you for sharing your poem!

    I like many of the rhymes, they are pleasing to me mental ear, especially these: “I wish (I wish) I wasn’t always trying to be right/ …to pick a fight” and “So how did I manage/ To cause you so much damage

    In your poem, you asked:  “What did I do that made you walk away?/ There must be a reason/
    That you decided on leavin”- you answered that question at least in part earlier in the poem: you were  “always trying to be right… always trying to pick a fight….(and said) so many thing I wish I didn’t say”.

    I like it. Hope you write and share more.

    anita

    #163862
    Myles
    Participant

    Yeah, I kind of noticed that halfway through writing it, I was listening to a beat while writing it and I guess I got carried away a little. But thank ou Anita.

    #164000
    eight
    Participant

    Hi there

    I love it. It’s beautiful !!! Keep writing  your songs You’ve got it right!

    Nothing better than real feelings put into words in a song. I wish I could hear the melody also.

     

    Best regards. Gr8

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