Dear Lucas:

As far as asking the readers question so to establish a bridge with the readers, better ask open ended questions than asking did you ever think this or that way, or feel this or that way because if the reader did not, he or she may feel excluded from your experience and less motivated to keep reading.

Regarding your comment to the reader that you don’t want to trivialize the issue by adding humor- if you believe that you are trivializing the topic by adding humor, don’t add the humor. Telling the readers that you don’t mean to trivialize the topic does not take away the trivializing affect, if it exists.

I like your writing, I think you are talented this way.

anita