Dear Anita,

Thanks for your input and examples given me. You’re a such unique person to be compared with. You’re really in a different planet. I’m sorry for the late reply i was literally battling up with malaria yesterday. Perhaps I’ve recovered now and feels physically fit.

My little niece this is how she approached the question asked; for her to seek for her scholarship.

Why should you be selected? any challenges  overcome and qualification. Please discuss that you any have academic community work or leadership experiences (Max. 500 words only)“
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Dear Admission officer,
As a dedicated student with a passion for community service and leadership, I have consistently sought opportunities to grow both academically and personally. My journey has been marked by academic excellence, active involvement in community work, and a commitment as a housewife too leading with integrity and purpose.
I have excelled academically, earning a place on the school ’s List for three consecutive years and being awarded a prestigious scholarship for my hardworking in science section at Kuajok Comprehensive College . My coursework in sustainable development and participation in a capstone project of academic on renewable energy solutions have equipped me with the knowledge and skills essential for making a meaningful impact.
My commitment to community service is reflected in my work with Samaritan clinic as an affiliate offered, where I volunteered to organize clean-up drives and educational workshops in underprivileged areas. Leading a team of volunteers, I successfully raised awareness about environmental conservation, reaching over 12 community members. This experience not only honed my organizational skills but also deepened my understanding of the importance of grassroots activism.
In my role as Head perfect of the Kuajok Comprehensive College, I spearheaded initiatives aimed at promoting sustainability on campus. This included organizing a campus-wide recycling program and collaborating with local businesses to reduce waste. Navigating the challenges of coordinating a large team and managing logistics, I developed strong leadership and communication skills, which were crucial in the program’s success.
Balancing rigorous clinic hospital with part-time work to support my education and house chores has been a significant challenge. Overcoming this taught me time management, perseverance, and the value of hard work. Additionally, coping with a major personal loss during my sophomore year was a turning point that strengthened my resilience and determination to excel.
With a blend of academic excellence, community engagement, and proven leadership, I am confident in my ability to contribute positively to Nursing Program at Ayii  university if award this opportunity. I am eager to bring my skills, experiences, that I’ll earned in this role, and to continue growing as a leader committed to making a difference.

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Dear Anita could you proofread and let me know where she went wrong.

Thanks

Greg