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September 2, 2017 at 1:21 pm #166720MylesParticipant
I called this song No Doub,t and it’s a guy I… was deeply infatuated with in school and while I don’t have feelings for him anymore, I still find him really attractive. The gag is he’s straight so I have no chance with him, but this was the phase I was in before I realised he would never feel the same way about me as I did about him. I thought of the singer Amerie a lot while writing this, and I referenced one of her songs in the bridge. I think I’m beginning to hate my writing less and less, something feltright while I was writing this. So hrere goes :
This all happened oh so quickly
Today, things are happening in threes
Strolling, Walking then running away
But my heart and mind are in disarray
Trippin, Fallin’, Stumblin’
Self control is crumblin’
My desire barely contained
I think my love is ’bout to rain
Pre-Chorus
I know this is something that I can’t ignore
Your everything has me wanting to explore
If you gave me one shot of you, I know that I’d be seeing stars
But telling youall this would have to be the hardest part
Chorus
No Doubt I’ll be trying to catch your eye
Because you’re so next level fly
Can I love you til I die
That would make things oh so right
No doubt I’ll make a fool of myself
Then stay at Heartbreak Hotel
You have me under some type of spell
Jonesing for you, can’t you tell
You have me (Fallin’)
You have me (Trippin’)
You have me (Flippin’)
You have me (Stallin’)
Everytime you come around
I swear I trip over the ground
Always got my full attention
Then comes the doubt, the apprehension
Never felt this way before
But at the same time I’ve never been so sure
That something felt so right for me
If I could just talk to you, you would see
If you left my sight, just know that I would surely die
You’re so incomparable, this is something that I can’t deny
What I have for you is so deep, so real, so honest, so true
If you feel the same way, why don’t you give me some clues
Chorus
You’re that 1 thing has me trippin’
You’re that 1 thing has me flippin’ (you did)
Your the reason my heart is reeling
It’s that one thing you did (oh oh oh)
I just can’t wait to get witchu
Even if you have me feeling so blue
Cause we’d make up by the end of the night
And I know we’d be oh so tight
You have me (Fallin’)
You have me (Trippin’)
You have me (Flippin’)
You have me (Stallin’)
Chorus
End
I feel like I’m going to be writing more about me and less about my relationships from now on.
September 3, 2017 at 7:09 am #166750AnonymousGuestDear Myles:
Thank you for sharing another song. It rhymes so well, I can hear the rhythm in my mind’s ear as I read it. It has a very nice flow to it. It doesn’t have too much rhyming, a good balance, in my evaluation, between rhyming and rhythm. Here is one part where it “sounds” so good to me:
“If you left my sight, just know that I would surely die
You’re so incomparable, this is something that I can’t deny
What I have for you is so deep, so real, so honest, so true
If you feel the same way, why don’t you give me some clues.Good Love Song. Interesting, you wrote that you “finally wrote something happy”, and that something happy includes “If you left my sight… I would surely die”- such emotional dependency, if literally true, will make happiness, well… very short lived.
anita
September 3, 2017 at 10:34 am #166784MylesParticipantI understand where you’re coming from Anita, I think that when you’re smitten with someone, you would say something like that though, and then you realise that’s not how love “works.” It’s something you work on. And I guess because I was thinking of Amerie when I wrote this, who has a very passionate delivery, I kind of thought she would say something like this. The song was still about something I went through though.
September 4, 2017 at 6:43 am #166842AnonymousGuestDear Myles:
I understand. It is a passionate delivery and passionate love songs have this life-or-death wording. Art, as in poems and songs, is about expressing one’s emotions in words any which way, however it feels like, uninhibited. (It is my personal passion, I suppose, to analyze further, as I did in my last post to you).
Looking forward to more songs and posts from you.
anita
September 4, 2017 at 9:20 am #166870MylesParticipantThank you Anita. Another reason why some of the lyrics are so passionate is because there was probably a part of me that understood that this guy would never feel the same way about me as I did him, and that was hard to accept, thus the almost “pleading” way it might come across.
September 4, 2017 at 11:06 am #166888AnonymousGuestDear Myles:
Having an incompatible sexual orientation will make it impossible, a relationship, that is, although in certain circumstances, straight men do have physically intimate relationships with other men. I also noticed that emotional connections between two straight men who are not physically involved and have no such plans can be very strong nonetheless.
anita
September 5, 2017 at 6:35 am #166978MylesParticipantI guess they’d be called Men Who Have Sex With Men at that point. The problem is, that when you aren’t honest about who you are, you end up hurting people (I’m talking about guys who say they are curious when they know they’re attracted to women or people who just want to “experiment.” I just feel like a stable relationship is off the table if you aren’t sure of yourself.)
September 5, 2017 at 9:29 am #167010AnonymousGuestDear Myles:
I agree: “when you aren’t honest about who you are, you end up hurting people”- very much so. It is so important.
anita
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