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August 6, 2024 at 12:56 pm #435876
Thondit
Participant<p style=”text-align: left;”>Dear Anita,</p>
How have you been doing?I believe you are keeping well at the present.
I’m also doing great.
Hello Anita kindly take your time to look into this request about this two questions below.
I’m not a medical professional nor politician.
My niece son and daughter got scholarship ( the boy applied for Medicine and the girl with nursing)
And these are the two questions they ask for reach to write.
1.How will your healthcare use your education to contribute to improving healthcare for underserved populations in South Sudan? (Max 500 words only)
2. Why should you be selected? any challenges overcome and qualification.
Please discuss that you any have academic community work or leadership experiences (Max. 500 words only)<!–/data/user/0/com.samsung.android.app.notes/files/clipdata/clipdata_bodytext_240806_214220_716.sdocx–>Kindly I need your input since I’m an aviator?
Looking forward to seeing your positive response Anita.
Regards
Greg.
August 6, 2024 at 1:05 pm #435877anita
ParticipantDear Greg: I will read and reply when I am back home (it will be hours from now).
anita
August 6, 2024 at 1:11 pm #435879Thondit
ParticipantDear Anita,
Thanks for the quick response. I will always remember your support.
You are such a loving and helpful person in this forum.
May God bless you Anita.
I’ll be waiting for your response.
Greg.
August 6, 2024 at 6:22 pm #435892anita
ParticipantDear Greg:
You are welcome, and thank you for your appreciation! I thought I might answer you this Tues evening (here), but I need a better focus, so I’ll reply Wed morning, which I believe will be your Wed afternoon or evening.
anita
August 6, 2024 at 9:15 pm #435900Thondit
ParticipantDear Anita,
Yes it is truly Wednesday morning here to us. No problem just take your time to think for away we can approach these two different questions that were asked to be essay.
Be blessed dear.
Greg.
August 7, 2024 at 9:11 am #435901anita
ParticipantDear Greg:
“the boy applied for Medicine and the girl with nursing… 1.How will your healthcare use your education to contribute to improving healthcare for underserved populations in South Sudan? (Max 500 words only)“- if I was to answer this question, I would first read about the history of healthcare in South Sudan, and about the current healthcare situation: strengths, weaknesses, and what needs to improve for the underserved population in Sout Sudan. I would express that I care about the underserved population and that I am very motivated to help them. I would bring up any of my past efforts to help the underserved in my community, such as donating food and volunteer work.
From merry. com/ blog/ common scholarship essay prompts (no spaces): “2. How have you contributed to your community? This is a common essay prompt for community service applications. In this essay, describe your experience in community service, explain how you’ve given back, or share volunteer opportunities you’ve participated in… How do you plan to continue to support your community in the future?…Sometimes this is easy because your intended career path is service-oriented (for example, if you want to be a nurse, doctor, teacher, or social worker)”.
Second question you posted, Greg: “2. Why should you be selected? any challenges overcome and qualification. Please discuss that you any have academic community work or leadership experiences (Max. 500 words only)“- In regard to answering this question, they can go to the same resource I mentioned above (merry. com/ blog/ common scholarship essay prompts). Quote (a similar questions to #2 above): “7. Why do you deserve this scholarship? Scholarship providers are basically asking, “Why should it be you?” with this scholarship essay prompt. Paint a picture of why you’re the most deserving student for this scholarship award…”.
There may be other online resources regarding answering scholarship application questions in an essay form. There are also resources regarding answering the same questions in an in-person interview form, and these can be helpful as well. Two such are: scholarshiptab. com/ blog/ top 40 scholarship interview questions and answers, and in regard to scholarships in medicine: meds school insiders. com/ pre med/ scholarship interview questions.
A quote from the latter: “4. Why Should You Get This Scholarship Over Other Candidates? Being asked to compare yourself to other candidates is often the hardest question to answer, as it requires you to be confident and humble at the same time… Lead with humility while also not shying away from the strengths, attributes, and aspirations that make you an ideal fit for this scholarship”.
There is more that the two young people in your family can use from the online resources I mentioned (and other resources they may come across). I wish them success, and I wish better health care for the underserved in South Sudan!
anita
August 8, 2024 at 12:11 pm #435985Thondit
ParticipantDear Anita,
Thanks for your input and examples given me. You’re a such unique person to be compared with. You’re really in a different planet. I’m sorry for the late reply i was literally battling up with malaria yesterday. Perhaps I’ve recovered now and feels physically fit.
My little niece this is how she approached the question asked; for her to seek for her scholarship.
Why should you be selected? any challenges overcome and qualification. Please discuss that you any have academic community work or leadership experiences (Max. 500 words only)“
<!–/data/user/0/com.samsung.android.app.notes/files/clipdata/clipdata_bodytext_240808_205540_224.sdocx–>Dear Admission officer,
As a dedicated student with a passion for community service and leadership, I have consistently sought opportunities to grow both academically and personally. My journey has been marked by academic excellence, active involvement in community work, and a commitment as a housewife too leading with integrity and purpose.
I have excelled academically, earning a place on the school ’s List for three consecutive years and being awarded a prestigious scholarship for my hardworking in science section at Kuajok Comprehensive College . My coursework in sustainable development and participation in a capstone project of academic on renewable energy solutions have equipped me with the knowledge and skills essential for making a meaningful impact.
My commitment to community service is reflected in my work with Samaritan clinic as an affiliate offered, where I volunteered to organize clean-up drives and educational workshops in underprivileged areas. Leading a team of volunteers, I successfully raised awareness about environmental conservation, reaching over 12 community members. This experience not only honed my organizational skills but also deepened my understanding of the importance of grassroots activism.
In my role as Head perfect of the Kuajok Comprehensive College, I spearheaded initiatives aimed at promoting sustainability on campus. This included organizing a campus-wide recycling program and collaborating with local businesses to reduce waste. Navigating the challenges of coordinating a large team and managing logistics, I developed strong leadership and communication skills, which were crucial in the program’s success.
Balancing rigorous clinic hospital with part-time work to support my education and house chores has been a significant challenge. Overcoming this taught me time management, perseverance, and the value of hard work. Additionally, coping with a major personal loss during my sophomore year was a turning point that strengthened my resilience and determination to excel.
With a blend of academic excellence, community engagement, and proven leadership, I am confident in my ability to contribute positively to Nursing Program at Ayii university if award this opportunity. I am eager to bring my skills, experiences, that I’ll earned in this role, and to continue growing as a leader committed to making a difference.Amira Mabil<!–/data/user/0/com.samsung.android.app.notes/files/clipdata/clipdata_bodytext_240808_210106_567.sdocx–>
Dear Anita could you proofread and let me know where she went wrong.
Thanks
Greg
August 8, 2024 at 12:24 pm #435986Thondit
Participant<p style=”text-align: left;”>Dear Anita,</p>
First how are you? This is what I suppose to do from the start of writing the above message. Also i want you to proofread this little girl who really seeking this scholarship.This is the second question asked.
1.How will your healthcare use your education to contribute to improving healthcare for underserved populations in South Sudan? (Max 500 words only)“
<!–/data/user/0/com.samsung.android.app.notes/files/clipdata/clipdata_bodytext_240808_211435_892.sdocx–>Dear Admission Officer,
If given this opportunity to study medicine, I’ll truly use this knowledge and experience, that will equipped me with the skills to address critical healthcare challenges in underserved populations. I am particularly driven to use and improve healthcare in South Sudan, where disparities in access to essential services are profound.*Educational Background:**
My academic journey has been focused on understanding and addressing health inequities. Through the little experience I’ve earned from Tonj Civil hospital and health systems management, I have gained a comprehensive understanding of the social determinants of health and the strategies needed to combat them. Additionally, my dream is to be medical attendant to save the life of vulnerable people settings honed my ability to deliver patient-centered care, particularly in resource-limited environments.Understanding of the Challenges in South Sudan:**
South Sudan faces significant healthcare challenges, including high maternal and child mortality rates, widespread infectious diseases, and a severe shortage of healthcare professionals. The ongoing conflict and displacement have further exacerbated these issues, leaving many communities without basic healthcare services. I recognize that addressing these challenges requires not only medical interventions but also a deep understanding of the cultural, social, and economic factors that influence health.Applying My Education:**
I plan to use my education to design and implement community-based health programs that focus on prevention and education. For instance, by leveraging my knowledge of epidemiology, I can help establish surveillance systems to monitor and control the spread of infectious diseases. My training in health systems management will be crucial in strengthening local healthcare infrastructure, improving supply chains for essential medicines, and ensuring that healthcare delivery is sustainable and efficient.Collaborative Efforts:**
Collaboration with local healthcare providers, NGOs, and government agencies will be central to my approach. By working with these stakeholders, I aim to develop culturally appropriate health education campaigns and train community health workers to extend the reach of care. I also plan to engage with local leaders and communities to ensure that healthcare initiatives are aligned with their needs and are sustainable in the long term.Impact and Vision:**
My ultimate goal is to contribute to a healthcare system in South Sudan that is resilient, equitable, and accessible to all. I envision a future where basic healthcare services are available to even the most remote communities, where maternal and child health outcomes are significantly improved, and where the burden of infectious diseases is greatly reduced. I am committed to ongoing learning and adapting my strategies to meet the evolving needs of the population, ensuring that my efforts have a lasting and positive impact.
<!–/data/user/0/com.samsung.android.app.notes/files/clipdata/clipdata_bodytext_240808_211845_018.sdocx–>Wah I think I see she’s fairing it up.
What do you think too?
Looking forward to seeing you occasionally reply this. I believe she need both our help contribution.
My best wishes.
August 8, 2024 at 5:09 pm #435989anita
ParticipantDear Greg:
I am fine, thank you. I will gladly read and reply Fri morning (Wed afternoon here).
anita
August 9, 2024 at 7:42 am #436000anita
ParticipantDear Greg:
“I was literally battling up with malaria yesterday. Perhaps I’ve recovered now and feels physically fit“- I hope you did recover, Greg!
I am not any kind of expert at proofreading (and English is not my first language), or at applying for scholarships (in the U.S., in South Sudan or anywhere else in the world), so please keep that in mind as I do my best proofreading and commenting on your niece’s two answers (my comments are in parentheses and my re-writing suggestions are boldfaced):
Answer 1: Dear Admission officer, As a dedicated student with a passion for community service and leadership ( (I would write more directly: I am a dedicated student with a passion for community service and leadership, and), I have consistently sought opportunities to grow both academically and personally. My journey has been marked by academic excellence, active involvement in community work, and a commitment as a housewife too, leading with integrity and purpose. (add detail, ex., if her household includes children: and a commitment as a housewife, teaching my children to have integrity and purpose in life).
I have excelled academically (give a bit of detail what “excelled academically” means, like what grades did she earn), earning a place on the school ’s List (what is the title of the List? For ex., List of Excellence) for three consecutive years, and being awarded a prestigious scholarship for my hardworking (hard work) in (the) science section at Kuajok Comprehensive College. My coursework in sustainable development (I would underline or italicize “sustainable development”) and participation in a capstone project (again, I would underline or italicize “capstone project”) of academic (delete “of academic”) on renewable energy solutions have equipped me with the knowledge and skills essential for making a meaningful impact.
My commitment to community service is reflected in my work with (the) Samaritan clinic (Samaritan Clinic) as an affiliate offered (delete “offered”), where I volunteered to organize clean-up drives and educational workshops in underprivileged areas. Leading a team of volunteers, I successfully raised awareness about environmental conservation, reaching over 12 community members. This experience not only honed my organizational skills, but also deepened my understanding of the importance of grassroots activism.
In my role as Head perfect (Head Perfect, if both words are in the title of her role, also, underline or italicize it) of the Kuajok Comprehensive College, I spearheaded initiatives aimed at promoting sustainability on campus. This included organizing a campus-wide recycling program and collaborating with local businesses to reduce waste. Navigating the challenges of coordinating a large team and managing logistics, I developed strong leadership and communication skills, which were crucial in the program’s success.
Balancing (a) rigorous clinic hospital with part-time work to support my education and house chores has been a significant challenge. Overcoming this taught me time (self-)management, perseverance, and the value of hard work. Additionally, coping with a major personal loss (perhaps give a minimal detail of the kind of loss, just a few words) during my sophomore year was a turning point that strengthened my resilience and determination to excel.
With a blend of academic excellence, community engagement, and proven leadership, I am confident in my ability to contribute positively to (the) Nursing Program at Ayii university (University), if award this opportunity (if I am awarded this valuable opportunity). I am eager to bring my skills, experiences, that I’ll earned in this role, and to continue growing as a leader committed to making a difference. (I am eager to bring my skills and experience to the Nursing Program at Avii University, and continue to grow as a leader, committed to making a difference).Answer 2: Dear Admission Officer, If given this opportunity to study medicine, I’ll truly (delete “truly”) use this knowledge and experience, that will equipped me with the skills (delete “that will equipped me with the skills”) to address critical healthcare challenges in underserved populations. I am particularly driven to use and improve healthcare in South Sudan, where disparities in access to essential services are profound.
*Educational Background:** My academic journey has been focused on understanding and addressing health inequities. Through the little experience I’ve earned from Tonj Civil hospital (Hospital) and health systems management (underline or italicize “health systems management”), I have gained a comprehensive understanding of the social determinants of health and the strategies needed to combat them. Additionally, my dream is to be (a) medical attendant, to save the life (lives) of vulnerable people, settings honed (delete “setting” and instead: honing, or refining) my ability to deliver patient-centered care, particularly in resource-limited environments.
“Understanding of the Challenges in South Sudan:** South Sudan faces significant healthcare challenges, including high maternal and child mortality rates, widespread infectious diseases, and a severe shortage of healthcare professionals. The ongoing conflict and displacement have further exacerbated these issues… I envision a future where basic healthcare services are available to even the most remote communities, where maternal and child health outcomes are significantly improved, and where the burden of infectious diseases is greatly reduced. I am committed to ongoing learning and adapting my strategies to meet the evolving needs of the population, ensuring that my efforts have a lasting and positive impact.”- I have no proofreading or other suggestions to this part, reads excellent to me. I like the humility in being “committed to ongoing learning and adapting my strategies”, in combination with her positive attitude/ optimism that she will have a “lasting and positive impact”.
I am impressed by your niece’s intelligence, education and plans to help improve healthcare in South Sudan!
anita
August 9, 2024 at 2:14 pm #436016Thondit
ParticipantDear Anita,
I’m happy for your input and a wonderful experience. A million appreciation you were really born with wisdom to shape others people.
May God continue to bless you in your entire life.
My best wishes to you.
Greg.
August 10, 2024 at 8:00 am #436038anita
ParticipantDear Greg:
You are very welcome, and thank you for your million appreciations, for your blessing and for your best wishes!
anita
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